Revision Statement
For my third paper in this course I want to look at it in terms of how I can make this paper clear to the reader. I’ve mentioned before how run-on sentences can be a big problem in my paper, and although this can contribute to the issue of clarity, there is more to this issue than just that. When I write my paper, I often will put all of my ideas into the paper, getting out everything I want to say the first round through which usually means that my ideas are very disorganized and hard to follow. It is often hard for myself to follow when I first comb through what I have written, which means that for another person to read that, it makes it almost impossible. For this paper, I want to make sure that my ideas are as clear I can make them to the reader because it will make my paper more powerful in terms of what message the reader takes away or what meaning they get from my work. I’m going to still be working towards having less run on sentences and grammatical errors, but the biggest focus I have for this paper is making sure my claims and ideas are clear, and generally make sense while supporting my thesis statement on the topic of becoming an adult with the influence of technology.
